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Post by firedragoon18 on Oct 14, 2012 1:47:46 GMT -5
Avatar Name:Fire Dragoon Appearance: Affiliation:To HimselfGroup:Red Legion First Link:Was a day after he downloaded the Brain Burst program from his sister. The next day at school he recieved a challenge from a unknown fighter not realizing who this opponent was he accepted it. While in the arena his opponent started to attack him but Tetsuo kept dodging. Tetsuo then heard his opponent call him a coward and it was with that he reconzied who his opponent was the person who kept picking on him . The match went on for awhile Tetsuo got lucky enough to win the fight with just 1hp left. After winning his first fight he got excited for more fights and hoped he could win them.
The next day he recieved another challenge feeling confindent he accepted to find a guy in red armor he figured he could take him and without realizing the level difference Tetsuo was brought down to 1 hp. Realizing Tetsuo's skills the guy in the red armor offered him to join the red legion.Tetsuo accepted his offer and become a new member of the red legion Faceclaim:Dart Legend Of DragoonSource:Ceostra
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Post by Ceostra on Oct 14, 2012 1:51:51 GMT -5
Everything seems to be in order. Only thing needed is to extend your first link another paragraph
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Post by Ceostra on Oct 14, 2012 14:45:49 GMT -5
Ok, only thing wrong here is just to split the first link into 2 paragraphs and just extend it another couple seconds and you'll be approved. Bump when edited ^^ Edit: to keep from double posting, I am just editing this one to add in that its approved.
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